構(gòu)思點撥

圖片中一個小男孩，早已進(jìn)入甜蜜的夢鄉(xiāng)，電視卻依然在播放，這時候媽媽走過來幫他關(guān)了電視，還責(zé)備他為什么總是忘記關(guān)電視。顯然，直觀看來，這幅圖是在告訴我們要節(jié)約用電。但是，我們?nèi)绻麖母�宏觀，更深層次的角度去思考，這幅圖正是在告訴我們一個流行的生活理念：低碳生活。所以本文旨在倡導(dǎo)一種低碳環(huán)保的生活方式。因此本文的內(nèi)容和結(jié)構(gòu)可如下：

第一段：描述圖畫；第二段：列舉現(xiàn)象，分析影響；第三段：建議措施，展望未來。

思維拓展

環(huán)保話題，例如節(jié)約能源、拼車、交通問題等圖片都可以與低碳生活的理念相聯(lián)系，從低碳的角度入手展開寫作。

高分范文

As is vividly depicted by the drawing above, a boy is sleeping soundly① and comfortably in the sofa, with the television on, when his mother comes and turns off the television for him, blaming the boy for not having turned off the television again②。

This phenomenon can easily be found anywhere in our daily life. Many people are used to doing③  everything with the television on, not actually watching it at all. Such a habit can cause waste of much electricity and energy, and result in the emission of carbon. This deviates from the popular concept of “low carbon life” — to reduce the emission of carbon, especially carbon dioxide, to protect our environment and realize sustainable development. According to statistics, if we can decrease the time for having the television on by one hour each day, we can deduce the amount of carbon emission by 4. 71 kilogram each month。

To serve as responsible stewards of the planet④, we must promote and popularize a low carbon life among the public from every detail in our daily life. We must change the past practice of sacrificing long-term environmental health for short-term rapid economic development, and shift to developing green economy, circular economy and low carbon economy. All these effective measures can help us to reach harmony between development of the society and health of the nature。

佳作妙譯

如上圖生動地展示，一個小男孩正在沙發(fā)上舒適地睡覺，電視還開著。這時候媽媽走過來幫他關(guān)了電視，責(zé)怪小男孩又忘了關(guān)電視。

這種現(xiàn)象在我們的生活中隨處可見。很多人習(xí)慣于做什么事情都開著電視，實際上并不看。這種習(xí)慣會導(dǎo)致電力和能源的浪費，這會導(dǎo)致碳排放。這偏離了流行的“低碳生活”的理念。低碳生活是指，減少碳，尤其是二氧化碳的排放，以保護(hù)環(huán)境，實現(xiàn)可持續(xù)發(fā)展。根據(jù)統(tǒng)計數(shù)據(jù)，如果我們每天把開電視的時間減少一小時，則每個月可以減少4. 17千克的碳排放量。

作為對地球負(fù)責(zé)任的管理者，我們必須在公眾中推廣并普及低碳的生活方式，從日常生活中的每個細(xì)節(jié)開始。我們必須要改變?yōu)榱双@得短期的快速經(jīng)濟(jì)發(fā)展，犧牲長期的環(huán)境健康的做法，轉(zhuǎn)向發(fā)展綠色經(jīng)濟(jì)、循環(huán)經(jīng)濟(jì)以及低碳經(jīng)濟(jì)。所有這些有效的措施可以幫助我們實現(xiàn)社會發(fā)展與自然有序發(fā)展之間的和諧。

名師點評

① is sleeping soundly: 熟睡，也可以表達(dá)為 A boy is fast asleep。“soundly and comfortably”這類副詞的加入，使得描述更生動活潑，而不是單調(diào)的主謂賓。

② A boy is sleeping soundly and comfortably in the sofa, with the television on, when his mother comes and turns off the television for him, blaming the boy for not having turned off the television again。

該句主干結(jié)構(gòu)是：A boy is sleeping, when his mother comes and turns off the television。

這個句型的含義是：一件事情正在發(fā)生(正在睡覺)，突然發(fā)生了另一件事(媽媽來關(guān)電視)。

“with the television on”： with 引導(dǎo)的伴隨結(jié)構(gòu)，即A boy is sleeping, while the television is on. 也可以寫成伴隨狀語A boy is sleeping, forgetting to turn off the television。

“blaming the boy for not having turned off the television again”，這句是媽媽關(guān)電視的伴隨動作，一邊關(guān)電視，一邊責(zé)怪孩子忘記關(guān)電視。

圖畫描述這句，寫得越精彩越好，這句是先入為主的句子，也是閱卷老師重點看的句子。

③ are used to doing: 習(xí)慣于做某事，使用短語表達(dá)，地道準(zhǔn)確。

④ to serve as responsible stewards of the planet:這是2005年真題閱讀中的原句，的文章里面的句型，引用的標(biāo)準(zhǔn)到位。

一般而言，環(huán)保類話題，都可以用這句話，引出第三段的個人評論。

歷年真題是一座巨大的寶庫，我們一定要充分利用，舉一反三。